Saturday, November 5, 2011

Is this Beginning any Good?

Its not a bad start to perhaps, a horror story. One thing..the bit about the teacher alking to you, the girl looking frozen, needs to be fleshed out. Its a little lacking rigt now. Flesh it out, make it more creepy, have him notice something else that seems to have stoped, like the hall clock's second hand or something. Other then that, i think a horror story.

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